此作文满分10分 我能得多少?Dear Maria,Thank you very much for hope I join your birthday party.But my father and mother are out on business.They are going to come back home next month.And my grandfather fell ill.He stay in bed.So I have to t

此作文满分10分 我能得多少?Dear Maria,Thank you very much for hope I join your birthday party.But my father and mother are out on business.They are going to come back home next month.And my grandfather fell ill.He stay in bed.So I have to t
此作文满分10分 我能得多少?
Dear Maria,
Thank you very much for hope I join your birthday party.But my father and mother are out on business.They are going to come back home next month.And my grandfather fell ill.He stay in bed.So I have to take care of him.And I must study for the coming mid-term exam.I can't join your birthday party.I'm very sorry.I just write E-mail to you.
Happy birthday to you!
Yours
Liu Ying

此作文满分10分 我能得多少?Dear Maria,Thank you very much for hope I join your birthday party.But my father and mother are out on business.They are going to come back home next month.And my grandfather fell ill.He stay in bed.So I have to t
for hope ==>for hoping
They are going to come back home next month
==>They are coming back home next month
He stay in bed
==>He stayed in bed
I just write E-mail to you
==>I just write to you.
/I just send the E-mail to you
时态,句式都不是很好,但是作为鼓励,给你七分,可能你们老师给你六分

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初中生写的吧，还好，hope应该改为hopeing，用动名词形式作介词for的宾语，And前面应用“，”号，当然了And首字母小写。stay应为单三形式。后面紧跟的And错误同前。
还好，能用上一些复杂句型，我看给7——8分吧。

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7-8分，无太大错误，句型简单，用词还不错。

大概6到7分。
Dear Maria,
Thank you very much for inviting me to join your birthday party.But my parents are out on business. They are going to be back next month. My grandfather is ill.He needs to...

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大概6到7分。
Dear Maria,
Thank you very much for inviting me to join your birthday party.But my parents are out on business. They are going to be back next month. My grandfather is ill.He needs to stay in bed. So I have to take care of him.I must study for the coming mid-term exam.I can't join your birthday party.I'm very sorry.I just write E-mail to you.
Happy birthday to you!
Yours
Liu Ying

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