Not a gold mine （中译英）大家帮我看看哪里改写错了.Saturday November.13th 2010 Sunny 19-22 degree Celsius Not a gold mineThe dream of finding missing treasures nearly came true recently.A new machine called revealer has been invented

Not a gold mine （中译英）大家帮我看看哪里改写错了.Saturday November.13th 2010 Sunny 19-22 degree Celsius Not a gold mineThe dream of finding missing treasures nearly came true recently.A new machine called revealer has been invented
Not a gold mine （中译英）大家帮我看看哪里改写错了.
Saturday November.13th 2010 Sunny 19-22 degree Celsius
Not a gold mine
The dream of finding missing treasures nearly came true recently.A new machine called revealer has been invented.It was used to detect gold which was buried underground.This machine was used in a cave by the sea shore where pirates used to store gold.The pirates used to bury gold in that cave but they failed to take it away.A searching party armed by these new machines entered in this cave and they hoped to find out the buried gold.When the leader examined the soil nearly the cave entrance the machine showed there was gold underground.The team members were so excited that they dug a hole two feet deep and only found a worthless coin at last.But the members continued to search everywhere in cave once.There was noting to be found but an empty metal trunk.Even so,many people still trusted that revealer would detect some valuable things soon.

Not a gold mine （中译英）大家帮我看看哪里改写错了.Saturday November.13th 2010 Sunny 19-22 degree Celsius Not a gold mineThe dream of finding missing treasures nearly came true recently.A new machine called revealer has been invented
The dream of finding missing treasures nearly came true recently.A new machine called revealer has been invented.It was used to detect gold which was buried underground.This machine was used in a cave NEAR THE sea shore where pirates used to store gold.The pirates used to bury gold in that cave but they failed to take it away.A searching party armed WITH these new machines entered this cave and they hoped to find out the buried gold.When the leader examined the soil near the cave entrance the machine showed there was gold underground.The team members were so excited that they dug a hole two feet deep and only found a worthless coin.But the members continued to search everywhere in cave.There was nothing to be found but an empty metal trunk.Even so,many people still trusted that THE revealer would detect some valuable things soon
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2010年阳光星期六November.13th 19-22摄氏度并非金矿寻找失踪宝藏的梦想几乎实现了最近。一台新机器已经发明了所谓的探宝。这是用来检测黄金，是埋在地下。这台机器所使用的海边那里的海盗用来存放黄金在山洞里。海盗们用来埋葬在洞里金牌，但他们没有把它拿走。一个搜索这些新机器的党武装进入这个洞穴，他们希望能找出埋藏金。当领导检查了土壤接近洞口的机器显示有黄金地下。队员们是如此兴奋，他们挖了...

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2010年阳光星期六November.13th 19-22摄氏度并非金矿寻找失踪宝藏的梦想几乎实现了最近。一台新机器已经发明了所谓的探宝。这是用来检测黄金，是埋在地下。这台机器所使用的海边那里的海盗用来存放黄金在山洞里。海盗们用来埋葬在洞里金牌，但他们没有把它拿走。一个搜索这些新机器的党武装进入这个洞穴，他们希望能找出埋藏金。当领导检查了土壤接近洞口的机器显示有黄金地下。队员们是如此兴奋，他们挖了一个两英尺深，最后只找到一个毫无价值的硬币。但是，各成员继续寻找洞穴到处一次。有注意到被发现，但一空铁皮箱。即使如此，很多人仍然相信，探宝将很快发现一些有价值的东西，你自己找找

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Dreams of finding lost treasure almost came ture recently. A new machine called 'The Revealer' has been invented and it has been used to detect gold which has been buried in the ground. The machine wa...

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Dreams of finding lost treasure almost came ture recently. A new machine called 'The Revealer' has been invented and it has been used to detect gold which has been buried in the ground. The machine was used in a cave near the seashore where --it is said-- pirates used to hide gold. The pirates would often bury gold in the cave and then fail to collect it. Armed with the new machine, a search party went into the cave hoping to find buried treasure. The leader of the party was examining the soil near the entrance to the cave when the machine showed that there was gold under the ground. Very excited, the party dug a hole two feet deep. They finally found a small gold coin which was almost worthless. The party then searched the whole cave thoroughly bud did not find anything an empty tin trunk. In spite of this, many people are confident that 'The Revealer' may reveal something of value fairly soon.这是原文。

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